Agni
It was shortly following the breaking dawnlicking skyward like the rising phenixin amber swirls and billowing cloudslike manna returning to the godsThe fire consumed with an unbridled hungerlike the...
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Although I liked this,I think it needs a bit more form and structureTo add a little more punch.It was shortly following the breaking dawnlicking skyward like the rising phenixin amber swirls and...
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In one way I agree with Gloom and it boils down to what we have already discussed and that is a tightening up of your lines. Try writing having a metronome or listening to some music. I must send you...
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I agree with all that was said but I missed more than the meter with this one, missed the target entirely. My metaphor was so ambiguous that nobody but me even understood that the piece was about one...
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